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Old 04-13-2008, 03:01 AM
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New poem, new to poetry, please help!?

This is a short story/poem thing, I'v only just turned 15 and I have been getting into writing for a couple of days.... tell me what you think

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A minuscule leaf that drops from the trees
Upon it arrives a tiny little seed,
The seed floats back into the wind
Off on an adventure it begins

Across a small plane does this seed go
Following the wind wherever it may blow
Down onto a lake the seed does plop,
In the water our seed cruises atop

Onto a bank our seed does arrive
Where a chirping bird finds it a snack
Then that bird agilely flies aback
In to the forest of which it came

There our bird will be found a loss
By an sly adept wolf that snatched
Our little bird right out of the sky
And runs into the mountains with his catch

Not far up the ridge the wolf does meet
An unexpected and abrupt defeat
A grotesque grizzly that gobbles him up
Then back down the forest he does schlep
Eventually the bear finds a river bank
One that he crosses into a breezy plane
Here he discovers a rather large tree
Where he sees a curious thing

A porky old man, plaid shirt, stick in hand
With a small yappy thing by his foot
When our young bear turns to run
He is simply shot down, by a fateful gun.
Copyright ©2008 AbriannaPeto
The certainly do not shlep, because shleping doesn't exist.
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