| The rhyming scheme gets kind of sloppy towards the end, but other than that it's pretty good. The cycle of life; I like it. Have you considered joining the community at deviantart.com? it's an art website fulls of paintings, drawings, stories, poems, among other things. If you do decide to join, my screen name is arata75. Maybe we can become friends. IM me if you want to know more. I'm 14, btw. |