| My new poem- "Awakening" - what do you think?
This is pretty good. The first stanza has an iambic meter, rather like a limerick, the rest is more free form, with hints of iambic meter mixed in with trochaic phrases. I think you should break up the first stanza so that it matches the flow of the other two, or add to the those so they match the first. Some of the other things you do don't detract form readability as much, such as changing from past to present tense (spoke—assuage).Overall, this is a good effort. The message is clear and cleansing. I really like that first stanza. TD |