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Old 05-15-2008, 10:12 AM
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Is this an acceptable Haiku?
No, it's weak."Cold alphabet soup" is a good start, but the rest of it is abstract.You want simple, sensuous, passionate words.Cold alphabet soupgels on the tableSolitude is not so bad.
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