Thread: I tried poetry again. Critique me please!?
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Old 03-02-2008, 02:58 PM
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Hmmmm, short , to the point, but I think it woulod have more impact longer. Kept like this I wpould change the final line to I simply am not there. Sounds more eloquent. Just my opinion.
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