Help me please.... This is a paragraph of what we had to write about in

[Rock_chick forever]

philosophy...Check..plz? I reckon others can tell me better than I can tell myself.
You often read about how growing up is incredibly difficult but I’ve always found it terribly easy. It requires very little thought and effort and was going to happen anyway, making what comes next not particularly eventful, I’m afraid. And yet it has been the most thrilling, eye-popping, eager, troubled, untroubled, confused and fearful few years of my life, and continues to be.
I'm told I need to calm down by some, but others tell me I'm too laid back. According to many, I look mournful. I keep getting told to cheer up. I'm a happy person really. I can’t grasp anything that’s shoved at me too fast, I’m slow at getting things and once I have, I like to explore them. I love to learn, but I’m not particularly fond of school. You’ll always find me stuck in a book of some sort. If I’m not reading, I’m writing, on the computer, listening to music, playing tennis, going crazy or bike riding.
I’ve got a mad obsession with Cesc Fabregas. A lot of my time spent admiring it, putting up posters and of course, reading and watching it. You'll find that I'll often bring it into any conversation every ten or twelve minutes, regardless of the prevailing drift of the discussion. I’m pretty famous for it now.
I'm not into the usual, so expect the unexpected. I'm pretty unpredictable. Don't give me credit for being organised. I'm far from it. If I itch somewhere on my body, I have to do it on the other side too. I take pleasure in eating Bonjela and toothpaste. Ketchup and mayo go suprisingly well together. I can't sing to save my life, and me + maths = disaster is about the only equation I've ever manage to comprehend. I'm always turning my pillow over, finding the cold side. I have the biggest cows lick ever - a cruel fact of life. And remember this: I hate umbrellas.
Serious reality has a hard time getting through to me but when it does, it hits me hard.

That’s ME
in philosophy we had to write a paragraph aobut ourselves...This is what i wrote but i dunno if it is ok...plz check for me

thank you...x

[ootmaheid]

I actually like it and you seemed to have answered the question.. it makes for interesting reading and it has good content.....but then I am not your Tutor....I did philosophy for a year at Uni and hated it...but then it was always difficult to know what they were looking for in answers and didn't like trying to analyse stuff written by people like JP Satre. ..changed it for French. More straightforward.

[Alibags]

you need to differentiate between growing up & growing older.
Apart from that, its a good controversial piece of literature.

[species8472]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xfq_A8nXMsQ

[weebeast21]

apart from a few gramatical and sentence structure errors you have got it spot on i know all about you, right here goes;

I reckon others can tell me better than I can tell myself.
You often read about how growing up is incredibly difficult but I’ve always found it terribly easy. It requires very little thought and effort and IT* was going to happen anyway, making what comes next not particularly eventful, I’m afraid. And yet it has been the most thrilling, eye-popping, eager, troubled, untroubled, confused and fearful few years of my life, and continues to be.
I'm told I need to calm down by some, but others tell me I'm too laid back. According to many, I look mournful. I keep getting told to cheer up. I'm a happy person really. I can’t grasp anything that’s shoved at me too fast, I’m slow at getting things and once I have GRASPED THEM*, I like to explore them. I love to learn, but I’m not particularly fond of school. You’ll always find me stuck in a book of some sort. If I’m not reading, I’m writing, on the computer, listening to music, playing tennis, going crazy or bike riding.
I’ve got a mad obsession with Cesc Fabregas. A lot of my time IS* spent admiring HIM*, putting up posters and of course, reading and watching HIM*. You'll find that I'll often bring HIM* into any conversation every ten or twelve minutes, regardless of the prevailing drift of the discussion. I’m pretty famous for it now.
I'm not into the usual, so expect the unexpected. I'm pretty unpredictable. Don't give me credit for being organised. I'm far from it. If I itch somewhere on my body, I have to do it on the other side too. I take pleasure in eating Bonjela and toothpaste. Ketchup and mayo go suprisingly well together. I can't sing to save my life* and me + maths = disaster is about the only equation I've ever manage to comprehend. I'm always turning my pillow over, finding the cold side. I have the biggest cows lick ever - a cruel fact of life. And remember this: I hate umbrellas.
Serious reality has a hard time getting through to me but when it does, it hits me hard.


YOU WILL FIND THE THINGS THAT I BELIEVE NEED CHANGIN IN CAPITALS AND HIGHLIGHTED WITH A * hope this helps.

[anne]

I loved it. I loved how you contradicted every thing you said . . . there is a literary word for that but I can't remember it. Your paragraph reminded of a book I read--- This is All. Very good book and very good paragraph.