someone good at poetry that would please help gets 10 points?

[James O]

I have to write a definition poem in LA class.
First is pain an emotion? Like I know its physically hurt but...
and I have this:
Pain is black.
Pain sounds like little kids crying when they fall and also adults crying when they loose
Someone.
Pain smells like the sickly clean smell of a hospital.
Pain tastes like
Pain feels like anything from a bruise to loosing someone close to you.


Can someone help me with the tastes like part?

[Jas G]

Pain is black.

Pain sounds like little ONES crying after a fall,
(should probably toss out adults crying when they lose someone)

Pain IS the scent of the antiseptic hospital,
Clean and yet sickly with the presence of death.

Pain tastes like the metal tang of blood after you've bit your tongue.

Pain feels like the bruise on your heart when you lose someone.




So overall:

Pain is black.
Pain sounds like little ones crying after a fall.
Pain is the scent of the antiseptic hospital,
Clean, yet sickly with the presence of death.
Pain tastes like the metal tang of blood after you've bit your tongue.
Pain feels like the bruise on your heart when you lose someone.

[Torrid M]

Pain tastes like the sorrowed words that spill from your mouth, drowning you with a flood of hurt and tears.

[punky]

pain tastes like the dirt under my feet