Another shot at amateur poetry your comment please?

[colin]

TWO PRECIOUS GEMS
Blessed with twin priceless gems be I
Beautfying my face embedded two my eye

These valuables will never I part pots of Gold
Protecting ,sacrificing entire wealth be even sold

What beautiful treasure wonderful gift of sight
Presented to man from his Creator All Might

Gratitude not to Him is mankind’s pet disdain
Pleas by Prophet’s on deaf-ears oft fall in vain

Winess how we summer bloom roses red,
If not for two pearls that emit light shed

Children growth joy sans darkness be,
Pray visual pleasures be for lifes eternity

[allyv]

im not the kind of person to answer this but it sounds good