Poetry Critique?

[Minor_Desturbances]

I would apreciate some feedback/ constructive tips on these two poems I have written Please.

1)Soundless whispers fill the air, terror strikes you cold.
No one cares, for no one's there.
Submissive is the chilling night.
Darkness caves in, steals your sight.
Screaming has no sound or meaning.
No predicted destination, this it's seeming.
Aimless now throughout the night.
Misdirection, strong confusion,
Can it be divine illusion?
No, no it's just me standing over you- your body newly claimed as corpse

2)Dark grey clouds begin to rise
Covering my deep blue skies.
What once was clear has now turned dark.

Cascade my thoughts upon the wall.
I once was promised I'll never fall.

Falling now to deep abyss.
I say goodbye with one last kiss.
And your love I'll never miss.

Blood stained blades have failed to fix
what once was broken and would not mend.
For you my love will never end.
The first one is about someone running away from their own shadow that they have created themselves...

[native woman]

I love this! this has a lot of rich symbolism, and would make for great song lyrics as well. ALOTOF EMOTION, and packs a wallop, very nicely written. Alot of times dark poetry is just dark, not alot of emotion, but you did this well .Hope you keep writing