*****POETRY***** care to comment * my first try BLINKS*?

goldenseaman · #1 (**permalink**) 02-24-2008, 05:40 PM

My first try

The sky was dark
The moon was high
We were alone
Just she and I
Her hair was black
Her eyes were too
I knew just what
She wanted to do
So with my courage
I did my best
And placed my hand
Upon her breast
I trembled and shook
And felt her heart
Slowly she spread
Her legs apart
I knew she was ready
But I didn't know how
It was my first try
At milking a cow

Katie B · #2 (**permalink**) 02-24-2008, 05:41 PM

It was good for comedy poetry!
the last bit kind of spoils the beauty of serious poetry.
but yeah..good rhyming (:
x

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