poetry? school project?

[mcfly_guy_says]

i just want some "positive" feedback i wrote this in 5 minutes for a school project due tomorrow....

What is Death?

What is death?
That causes sorrow and pain,
What is death?
Why isn’t it all the same?

What is death?
Where do we go?
What is death?
Will we ever know?

What is death?
A murder, a sin?
What is death?
And where does it end?

yeah so ummm yeah im planning to write more but thats it for now...
this part goes inbetween the 2nd and 3rd stanzaas

What is death?
We try and try,
What is death?
But we never get by.

What is death?
How do we get past
What is death?
Why doesn’t life last?

[LilliSeptember]

I don't really like it. I mean it's got more format. Maybe more descriptive. You can tell it was written quickly. You probably dispise poetry, but only when felt from the heart can poems be written well.

[Wings2Fly]

thats good =)

[nickthaniel1]

Looks good to me.

Except I didn't understand the question about whether it's all the same. And I thought the question about where does it end a little cliched.

But for 5 minutes it's very good. Maybe if you spent 10 minutes you'd come up with something really good.