Vote for my poem please on poetry.com?

[Skylerz]

I entered the poetry contest, and I am now one of the finalists. :]
Please read my poem, and tell me what you think of it,
also votes would be nice. Please&Thankyou. =]
Link;
http://www.poetry.com/voteforme/poemvote1.asp?PID=12908021

[isgoresvicepresident]

I have read your novel poem which cuts to the extraordinaire, and voted ten for its penultimate same.

[Joolissa]

It's a nice poem and you have potential as a writer. Keep working at it and look for new ways to express the feelings. I think you could expand on the feelings in that poem and find new ways to write them down. Many people write poems that clearly state the pain they're in, but a good challenge is to try to imply the pain without stating it. Showing instead of telling makes for great writing.

The one thing I did not like about your poem is the typo in the last two lines:

"Sorry, ever so sorry you couldn't the the girl
I can truly be."

I'm guessing you meant "...couldn't see the girl...." instead.