Poetry critique needed.?

[Jan]

I haven't written poetry in so long I'm embarrassed to say, but I would like your opinion of this poem. I already know that it needs more substance. I will add to it, but what do you think of the wording and the flow? Thank you for your help. Don't hold back. I'm a grown woman and like your honest opinions!



A Lover, A Friend

Gentle rain upon the roof..
Sunday, oh kiss me, not tell..
Roll into your waiting arms..
I ache.. such passion, we wail..

Long still I gaze upon your breathless flesh,
Beads glisten in the light.
Adoration bestowed by kiss and touch..
I drink your body's sight.

Your breath upon my face, just you,
so warm it makes me wane..
Oh, forgive, the sin, crying eyes,
the fruit makes me insane..

I sigh, a day has gone, you rise, Adonis I see,
in dream like, bitter sweet.
You take my heart from out my chest
and drag it beneath your feet.

Oh no, not now, I do not say it, I won't.
Perhaps next we meet beneath the oak
to lie naked on a blanket....or don't?
Splendorous, my dream lover..my friend.
The second line means that the writer doesn't want to talk, but wants to make love. I hope that answers the question or issue? Not sure, but thank you for reading!!!