Please critique my Cover Letter & Resume honestly, give me any and all helpful thaughts!!?

[JoshY0704]

Joshua Yount539 Emory Street Imperial Beach, CA 91932Phone: (619) 618-0499Email: yountjoshua@yahoo.comTo Whom It May Concern,I am writing this cover letter with expectations of achieving a position with your company as a server. I know there is a lot of turnover in this career. People decide that this is not what they want, or maybe it’s too stressful or they cannot work with the hours. I have many things to offer. I know what I want, as I have experience in this field. I honestly enjoy doing it, and love the rewards that come with this career. This would be a career stepping stone for me, so you can be comfortable in knowing that I can be counted on.The skills I have and the opportunity you can offer would make a great recipe for success for both the company and myself.Thank you for your consideration and the opportunity. I am confident that I will hear back from you, in the very near future. I will be available at your earliest convenience. You may contact me at anytime at (619) 618-0499Respectfully,Joshua YountObjectiveTo achieve a position as a server, where my customer service skills and outgoing attitude can be put to work at its best for the companies better being as well as my own.QualificationsGreat Customer Service Skills • Multi Tasks • Great Attitude • Bi–lingual • Works Well Under Pressure • Team Player • Food Knowledge • Stacks Several Plates On Each ArmWork History/Experience Feb. 2005 to Current -U.S. Air Force National Guard, Channel Island Air National Guard Base Camarillo CA, Services Technician - Welcome and greets customers- Provides quality customer service to dining facility customers- Cooks- Buses tables- Excepts suggestions and complaints with a smile- Performs various side work at the start and end of each mealApril 2005 to Current -U.S. Air Force 30th Security Forces Squadron VAFB Lompoc, Ca Security Forces Augmentee- Armed up with a rifle and side arm to prepare for the worst on a daily basis- Responsible for making split second important decisions- Report writing on a daily basis- Maintained order and the protection of classified government installations around the base - Assisted and challenged individuals without a secret clearance2004 to 2005 -Missouri Department of Corrections Moberly Correctional Facility, Moberly MissouriCorrectional Officer I- Responsible for the protection/security of inmates- Assisted with inmate movement- Responsible for making split second decisions- Report writing on a daily basis2004 to 2005 -Ricks American Grill, Moberly MissouriServer- Welcomed and greeted guests- Provided quality customer service to guest- Took orders, made recommendations and announced daily specials- Input orders in computer- Provided final bill to guests, accepted payments, processed credit cards2000 to 2004 U.S. Navy HC-11 NAS North Island Coronado, CAAviation Structural and Hydraulics Mechanic- Performed maintenance on 3 h-46 helicopters (Structural repairs, Mechanical Linkages, Painted)EducationFeb 2007 to April 2007 -Services Technician School, Lackland Air Force Base, San Antonio TX (military school equivalent to a civilian Hotel and Restaurant Management course certification) - Certificate Acquired2003 to 2004 - American Intercontinental University Online, Criminal Justice- Degree Not Acquired Feb 2000 to July 2000 –Naval Air Technical Training Center, NAS Pensacola Florida- Certificate Acquired ReferencesGiven upon request

[no2censors8679]

don't mention the negatives such as the high turnover. also don't waste your time and paper trying to be a waiter. you were a soldier and a prison guard? for gods sake get a job as a commisioneer giving out parking tickets for twice the pay and none of the hassle. they only hire ex millitary or ex police. what about a bank guard or something a little more prestiges that actually pays the bills and has better hours?

[ELK]

I it not clear why you talk about turnover in your cover letter. I would either take that out or bring it back to why they should hire you. I would also keep away from talking about this job being a stepping stone. Even if it is, I wouldn't introduce yourself by telling them you don't plan to stick around. Every statement in your cover letter should be an answer to the question "why should I hire you?"Also, maybe you should edit this post to remove your personal information, just for safety.